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Pull in here next 10 Fridays for some great Canadian verse. First up: 'A Creation Song' by Max Middle.

By Josh Massey, 30 Jul 2010, TheTyee.ca

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Turn off the engine, open your mind.

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"Only Whitman and Crane and Williams, of the American poets, are better than the movies," wrote Frank O'Hara in 1959.

Blockbuster Poem Fridays, our 10-week series which starts today, presents work from poets who are current, Canadian, and better than the movies.

Better than the movies? Yes, a blockbuster poem is a perfect way to pause and drift a bit before rejoining the fast-moving flow of the Internet. Much better than Titanic.

But wait. Isn't The Tyee an online news source? Right, which is why the poems were also chosen for the vital headlines they convey from the frontier of the imagination. As William Carlos Williams (one of O'Hara's anointed) wrote: "It is difficult/ to get the news from poems/ yet men die miserably every day/ for lack/ of what is found there."

Our 10 blockbuster poems were selected with the assistance of the publishers and the poets themselves -- and in some cases by a vote at The Tyee office.

To get things going...

A Creation Song

By Max Middle

Before night absorbs the last shades of day into its cloak
and feet begin to chatter across a known typography of clocks and brown air,
the first airy morning of a new universe dawns
with the mouth of darkness disgorging its pigment on a scintillant cosmos.
The earliest stroke of daylight smells of chaos; rivulets of sap break the ground.
And loosed from the marrow of night, an egg adrift chaos is ablaze:
light separates from dark, sun begins its journey across the sky.

The aether is a door invisible in darkness.
The hand on the door is first sanguine,
then it slams scintillant S fits doorways.
Or, S sense shiitake blam palo alto pall tree lap thud.
Out of E there, poultry flutter of wings,
lacking all, all that a flaccid ant eater could.
Flopsicle easer kicks the keeper's shackles, picks a pal
eager as straphic, traffic stalled as afferestic,
analeptic to a papa point of paratchik paparazzi,
loftitude, a stratospheric let down into a slide of
laughed a lot when lancelot's allotted lands doubled.
Hopscotch to take on a chance leashing it to fermentation.
Alone best left on a pot to boil out the trouble.
An hour steamed soft tall ships afloat left ticking
aloud on clouds, salt crumbs and balloons.

Yesterday on the bus, somebody asked what was ready.
Another person asked what was being read;
Today they are both asking what are you writing?
What are you doing? How the fuck are you?
Taking the grease to chance and finding it in there,
without station walls or limits or tacked up posters or
starvation lacking victims or lurking predators without prey.

new snow puffed louder peeled on the purchased affluence of
powdering a powerful person on the nose on the loose.
Because a pastime crimps a boiled plant to toughness
and it's off the fuffle, now that the stink is gone and the best
of the plant eaten or planted stuffed became the rest,
flaccid afloat and laughed a lot like a smile in the tackle berries
with alotta rolla hopscotch taking a chance leasing it to cherries.

A lotta roll around Tony with the Rolex
made with how much chance heated in a litre
of went ditched with pieces of hose mixed upside.
You want to get in but nobody will mind your absence,
just note that you might get in, but never mind that,
fade in and isolate the apparatchik learning new dance steps.
Never mind trancing, the brain is just smelling its chances,
chucking loads of procPsverbaux into a procession.
'Cause lotsa rolla gotta letta prole up to the window,
into swinging pictures before the roll over of 1789.
Get in with the right crowd and swing a lot to the better letters
with cut in half pop songs, gotta bell ramp in elle B la
'cause cut halves don't make right singing mindful soup spoons,
full of suspicion, just in the happy hemispheric hunt for trip
and trap and happy flopping Shakers in the shadow of Cathars.
In that lap, nobody remembered, the other sex, in your quarters,
at night, Fra Angelico crackle on, patron saint of artists.
In the monastery the same sex may be mindful of the way you feel
although they are a ship full of streamers cascading across fields of flowers
and crowds of flags waving war makers on and on and on.
Gotta make it across the hunt lotta bella, gotta mind it wisely,
chucking loads of flags on the way rolling humble in hemisphere,
alongside hunters and saints going to meet their ends with thunder in the brine,
back to the same place the blood goes night after night,
and we say we eat the same way every day, walking, talking streamers
to my own ship full of streaming, say we can stand without the flags
and the tears and the on of off is turned on to the point that it's just

out of a lab with lots of chemistry and the roll off of perspirant.
Much hope bouncing in a litre of shake a chance too iffy
to get in first nobody will mind your absence,
just note that you can't get in but never mind that,
the blood is the same in the ocean is all round humming to
human feelings, plant animal, shelter generating why outers if
cuffed to get in with the right crowd and swing a lot to the letter,
suave and coiffed, angel bright angel stars, of the hungry ones:
wait for the hungry ones, crippled against rage, filling the night,
without a sound for the sleepless can drink from naked form;
that shelter is ocean is gut plant fibre outer of leaf of Ahab wave awe.
Take whirling dolphins and their numbers slacken the how from slavery;
at land’s sight all the beast and bulrush come chiming through the nose.

Head conscious again, taking shelter off the ocean, the sea obsession:
in dwellers by the fire comfort war machines airplanes factories,
forcing the man made shackles; waging war airplane factories.
Never mind if you can't get in because this is the outer limit of profit chance;
was profit was a chance became a profit became a number mimicked nose
and smelt a lot like worship or the burning of birch, freedom of worship
left a lot to roll around rollers, fiddling with how much chance,
freedom from worship like the burning of birch comfort nose.
Airplane factories flagging fugitive the social make up of in between.
Control tucks Tim in and comfort is all the rest he dreams between the sheets
extant.

Abo abo avo above errant exit of F fry.
A F fry cans how much chance, how much more hope
U O you ought to know you let the cat out to the UFO
and the Pluto fakes but that's how it mines the absence,
tickles the outer limits of chance for profit,
hacks comfort from war airplanes' trance.
Tim is now many miles underground in the mine, above,
spitting out of the spent dust, the orphaned offspring of chaos emerge.
Combustible sputter of phlox, firefly and phizogs turning in the fog:
fire in all living things issued from primordial ground being
chaos the birth tattoo charting the life cycle of a chastened cosmos.
Flares, fizgigs and star needles combing night's abstinent flesh;
flames welling the mined fissures; crows cawing for the ghosts of freedom.
The folks back home never signed the treaty, never saw the soldiers.

How many beer cans did it take to make an army?
Not enough to fit in the cave with J Tipping Wad who shook a fist, wagged a finger,
to let you know he never had any stubbled scar tissue needing shelter.
Only touched you to see if you're still there.
In the dirt above shelter, liberty was never achieved and bargained away.
Did someone ask why? and Tim's been down all the while,
asking for up drunk, drunk on amour fou, just for that moment
when you saw him through the floorboards,
splashing through a thousand drunk tanks.
Anemone, purer than the clearest sky purring,
perennially ready satellite, further than any late 20th century efforts
and deaths, who can remember who or why they fed themselves to the cameras or
earlier to the 1st world war trenches.
Just J being Jake in the nib of now being benign:
take what you want because he'll take with him what he needs
when he comes up the ladder from yesterday,
absconding with his twin brother’s blessing.

Plant has gone to factory getting harder, holding fire.
A scorpion grows in shade of shiny steel.
Heedless, a panther stalks prey down a throttled engine
and downtown she finds a helpless clutch of engines quaking.
She feeds with a full appetite to static background
in a time and place with ladders opened up to a cracked ceiling
the stagehand forgot yelling for more rope, gone but promised
a salad he longed to scratch the fibre from.
Known because under a recorder remorse was found.
A mouse remounting desire aloud, unlidded, wrapt green, jungle platter, near
end tea colour:
the scene thought through with paralinguistic details everything from um and ah to
sighs and screams to some interjection, grimace or shuffle.
But nobody cared for the loss, nothing written note
crowd callouses show little of a knitted late 20th century
wrapt green in a shallow grave without a funeral but for up it went, it went with the
sputum that it made becuddling its elder brother before he went off again
and wagered his stakes to the aether.
Built on the all again of legging that made it just plain,
played like a game with all the nations waiting in line
to emulate an older sister who is everything just released from night,
a player in the original act of creation.
Riding out on rip tides of enthusiasm,
in love with their own hair, nationalism, smelling of urine.

Waking up welcomed to i wasn't in love for the sake of it or the dream or
a body or making again or any such thing that could be remembered.
Just imaginable downtown with an engine left on combusting a jogger,
passing a coiled anaconda on the riverbank, redolence of ardour and assimilation
staggers off from the limits of Shakers who intentionally communed,
imagining a community with all its members seeking homeostasis,
too much water and the sisters and brothers are in search of salt,
swimming downtown only to find the streets closed to Liberation Square,
demanding paradise and returning without groceries.

In the most extreme case of circus mania an acrobat extracted me,
blue tinged, from a fish hook locked deep inside a drained lake in deserted night.

The following day after swimming or jogging not remembering which,
i was at home alone.
Downstairs an exiled cricket chirped at perfect intervals.
The morning chaos appears afloat a new dreamt universe,
sails are unfurled in darkness and rivulets of sap trill the ground:
oil slicks a puddle; a flag is folded and left on the shelf.
An egg adrift the marrow of night is ablaze and hatching,
sun begins its journey across the sky.
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7  Comments:

  • warbler

    30-07-2010

    Maybe Max comes off better in sound...

    If this is 'great Canadian verse,' I'd hate to be punished with the not so great stuff.

    As my literature teacher said many years ago, "there's only one thing worse than a bad poet, and that's a bad poet with a new Thesaurus."

    Teacher would warn, If you don't know the meaning of a word, you should not include it in your poem, adding that "unless you are Jack-fucking-Kerouac" or Ezra-fucking-Pound, you have no business inventing your own words.

    Middle's piece started well and had me up until 'shades of day,' after which it quickly disintegrates into a mess of bad, contrived, pompous diction. Talk about abuse of the adjective. Good lord! A clear hallmark of the amateur poet is when s/he desperately pulls obscure adjectives out of the Thesaurus to compensate for a lack of poetic skill. Just a few examples:

    disgorging

    scintillant (abused twice in the same passage)

    aether

    sanguine

    afferestic, analeptic

    paratchik paparazzi (alliteration is for amateurs)

    loftitude (oh christ, are you kidding me? 'loftitude')

    stratospheric

    apparatchik

    procPsverbaux

    And by the time I got to "shiitake blam palo alto pall tree lap thud" I'd had just about enough of this author's "paralinguistic details."

    Can we get an actual example of "great" Canadian verse for the next instalment, please? Otherwise, I'll have to call my attorney and have him sue the Tyee for faulty advertising.

  • rob mclennan

    30-07-2010

    the poem,

    not sure why 'warbler' feels such need to insult the author and his capabilities, simply because s/he doesn't care for the piece; I've always been a fan of Max Middle's work, and his work, as 'warbler' mentioned, does incorporate sound quite heavily, both on the page and aurally, and what's wrong with inventing words? sounds like 'warbler' doesn't care for the style, no matter what Max has achieved; the venom seems childish; we've been waiting for years for Max to produce a first trade collection, and some of his pieces are quite magnificent, working in different non-linear styles;

  • Birch

    30-07-2010

    Obscure = Good?

    Modern poetry has always suffered an excess of obscurity, lending a kind of "if I can't understand what he's getting at, it must be good" impetus to our judgment.

    It (the poem) seems a bit pretentious to me, but each to his own. I like poetry, but I got bored. If that's my fault, I'll take the blame.

  • warbler

    30-07-2010

    dear mr mclennan, sir,...

    I concede, my tone was a bit strong, and your grievance has been noted. However, the spirit of my critique of the aforementioned 'poem' stands. I think it contains far too many weighty, contrived adjectives, which end up obscuring its meaning or intent, from this reader's vantage.

    When I see dense, bloated language like this in prose or poetry, it signals to me that the author has something to hide, or has an inferiority complex. Or it signals the author has no editor.

    I don't buy your counter-point that this is a unique example of creative writing via non-linear styles. I'm all for experimentation and the non-linear, but all too often these precepts or claims are used to shield against hard criticism, especially when the criticism comes from outside the official realms of the literati.

    I stand by my humble, minion-based observation that Max's piece is neither "great" nor "blockbuster" poetry in the Canadian context. And admittedly, this is where it gets tricky for both of us. Whose or what criteria do we appeal to in making such judgments? How do we avoid a collective free-fall into the murky depths of artistic relativism?

    You tell me why you think it's a great piece. I cited reasons why I think it isn't. I think it's bloated, pompous fluffery that hides behind a cloak of big, weighty adjectives, awkward diction and an appeal to the ever-popular defence of 'non-linear styles.' This is glorified coffee house slam poetry, which in the right context, may come off as fun, maybe even great if the performance is on target. But as a stand-alone piece of literature? Nope. Not for me.

  • JoshM

    31-07-2010

    the good ol' literary feud

    Thanks for the debate. We'll be posting a healthy mix of styles over the next 10 weeks, so hopefully there will occur a different kind of discussion each time.

    I personally love tagging along with a poet who is having so much fun with language, especially when they mix some classic literary lingo and historical references with the casual chatter of a picnic table conversation. It's a rush of colourful sounds and partial meanings I find similar to the experience of examining a work of abstract art.

    The special effects on display in "A Creation Song" earned it opening night billing here at Blockbuster Poem Fridays.

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